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Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
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This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Michael Szpik.
Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 18:31, 16 January 2022 (UTC)
Lead sentence needs extremely good cites to justify
[edit]"Corruption in Angola is a pervasive phenomenon, hindering economic growth and government-sponsored liberalization programs." -- We really cannot justify keeping a line like this as the lead of any article unless it's extremely well cited (beyond any realistic question of OR or POV). -- Writtenonsand (talk) 18:19, 28 January 2008 (UTC)
That's the problem with the entire article, which is why I originally put it to AfD because it appeared to me to be so rife with POV that it was not salvageable. In return, I was harangued by the original author, who seems to be oblivious to WP policies about deleting comments in AfD discussions and such. - Realkyhick (Talk to me) 21:39, 28 January 2008 (UTC) I'd love to see the policy that says it's okay to tag articles with PROD when you consider them POV. Please, enlighten me. Jose João (talk) 23:37, 28 January 2008 (UTC)"The South African invasions of Angola helped dos Santos strengthen his control within the MPLA, and he was able to make major economic, diplomatic, and political changes. In August 1987 he announced a major economic recovery plan. Blaming the nation's problems on excessive centralization of socialist planning, corruption, and too much bureaucracy, he proposed privatization of some state enterprises, banking reforms, and measures to encourage foreign investment. In 1988 he introduced plans to further liberalize Angola's economy."[1] Jose João (talk) 04:51, 29 January 2008 (UTC)
Isabel Dos Santos
[edit]I am not sure why someone removed the well-cited and written section on Isabel Dos Santos, but certainly it is applicable and necessary.--TM 11:09, 2 November 2016 (UTC)
Hi TM, I'm sorry but I disagree. I can't understand why there is a subchapter about Isabel dos Santos in an article called Corruption in Angola when nothing in the text backs up this accusation. All references are merely allegations without proof. These allegations are even denied after. Wikipedia has strong rules against this kind of situation. You can read more about it here. In order not to be misunderstood, I'm going to explain my opinion chapter by chapter: - Paragraph 1: The investments Isabel dos Santos has made in Angolan and Portuguese companies are transparent and have been made through transactions based on the arm's length principle. - therefore, we cannot say she is corrupt. - Paragraph 2: suggested that this wealth and power comes substantially from her father's influence and connection. - Forbes suggested??? Such expressions are not used by reliable sources within the policy of living persons. It must be evidence, not suggestions/baseless allegations. - Paragraph 3: her increased stakes could lead to a monopoly over much, if not most, of the media business central to Angola and Portugal. - False accusation. Isabel dos Santos has no media interests in Portugal or Angola. You can read about it here and here. And Isabel dos Santos was accused of political bias, and of having inside information and contacts in Portugal in her dealings. - another false accusation. Reference doesn't work, so according to Wikipedia policies it must be removed. - Paragraph 4: If this information is relevant (which I sincerely doubt, since once again there is no evidence, but only claims), this paragraph belongs to the subchapter about the "President". I will make this change, because I have not had time to judge the relevance of the references. - Paragraph 5: An investigative journalist discovered that at least $1.8 billion of Isabael's fortune originates from government funds. - Who? And where is the reference? We do not know, so we cannot make such statements. It has to be removed (according to Wikipedia policy). Also references are often written in Portuguese, and this is an English article. It makes no sense, we have to pay attention to this. I can read Portuguese but others can't. We cannot use all that is written in a website just because it suits us. We have to think about its relevance and its truthfulness. XavierD75 (talk) 15:19, 2 November 2016 (UTC)Major Page Update
[edit]So I rebuilt this page as an assignment for a university course... I think its pretty good.
There are some specific things that could be improved, however:
- Further theoretical discussion in each lead sections, supported by articles that are themselves thorough analyses of the subject in question.
- A discussion of the relationship between corruption and, repression and regime stability and how that relates to the legacies of war and the culture of violence (specifically extra-judicial killings, media persecution) and the effect on these things on civil society and culture. (among my references, Pearce, Schubert, and Messiant had a fair bit to say about that subject).
- More data with regard to the magnitude of economic appropriation and the consequences of corruption.
- More details regarding: Land concessions; corruption in the military; corruption and foreign aid; corruption in the broader economy; corruption in day to day life for Angolan citizens
- More cases, and expansion of detail provided for each case.
So, if for the next guy that shows up to add to this... that's what else I would have done had I had an infinite amount of time.